layered veil

looking past her outpost,
her last post
a silent night on a stolen street
she spoke a word
whispered in bed that broke
sorrows defined by mirrored me

asleep alone awash
the starry sky played no favorites
in a laser beam sky

she fell in love with vanity
she fell in layered veils
and remains
hidden.

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9 thoughts on “layered veil”

  1. she spoke a word
    whispered in bed that broke
    sorrows defined by mirrored me…fav part…and this carries a pretty cool beat through the first 3/4 of it…the hidden at the end is off beat and hard, but gives it weight…

  2. she spoke a word
    whispered in bed that broke
    sorrows defined by mirrored me

    Yes, awesome. I liked the feel of this, especially how it led to the end, where she still hides… it’s so easy to hide and I can feel how much you want to know her… so if the sorrows are defined by you, can you redefine them?

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