i’m at the station
and you
you are onboard
and you
dont know where
you can go
lets sit and listen
to the steel rails rolling
to the steel wheels rolling
across the plains
and through your dreams
I, I have to go now
before I take you by the hand
please understand
please understand
that I, I am only
reaching for the sky,
and I, I am only
the one who makes you cry
cry
cry cry cry
cry
The Borg Poet 
Sometimes repetition works so well in a poem…
Good stuff here.
Thanks for reading me…
the repitition in this is real effective…i allows you to feel the emo of the narator…love the train station too…nostalgia…and coming and going…
Thanks Brian. See you at the pub!
somehow this has something comforting and something disturbing to it..think the comfort comes from the repetition..
Nice write. I agree – the repetition works really well in this poem. Cool photo too.
I feel the way Claudia does…there is something comforting and disturbing…and I like the repetition.
I like it too. I like it too.
Is there or has there ever been anything as sad as trains taking loved ones away? I think not. And you sure brought it all home in this.
The cry repetition truly made the piece that much stronger, nicely done!
Uggg…it can be so very hard to reach as far as possible while trying to maintain that hold on the one you love. This reeks of sacrifice, loss, but is countered with the balance of hope and promise. I can see the train pulling away from the station…just can’t quite tell if you were able to let go to step aboard…Thought this awesome…
Thanks Tash.. I think I have done both, time will tell.
This has a music even without any instrument or voice. A violin and a sad guitar, maybe. Sometimes the sky isn’t all it’s cracked up to be, but this poem is flying out there anyway.
Oh, this was sad, and the repetition was like the clicking of the train on its tracks. So good.
Haunting!
a love story with sacrifice, tough decisions and the will to be true to one’s self is what I read in the sweet gentle repetitions of your lines. very nice!
love it,
pleasant read
🙂
Pleasant comment!
I agree with the above comments re repetition – fits the content of the poem well. // Peter.
I heard the cadence of the train here, very well done, the goodbye, the crying.
amazing word flow,
it makes one feel the power of your emotions, well done.
Thank you for dropping by and the very kind comment.